Lovely Girl
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hello
i need to improve the grammer in the bold below please
Natural fiber-reinforced composites with their favourable properties of strength, toughness, high modulus, low-cost, low density make them an attractive area of study for material scientists. This coupled with the uniqueness of being an environmentally friendly option in (grammar) that the fibers can be obtained from renewable sources; make natural fiber-reinforced composites a material for the future. Similarly, polymer-nanoclay composites have been widely investigated for their significant improvement in modulus, impact strength, barrier properties, heat resistance and thermal stability.
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EF_Team5
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Edited by: EF_Team5
May 18, 08, 11:35am ¦ #2
Good morning!
OK, how about, "This, coupled with the distinctiveness of being an environmentally friendly option in that these fibers can be obtained from renewable sources, makes natural fiber-reinforced composites a sustainable material for the future."
Or,
"This, coupled with the uniqueness of being an environmentally friendly option, because these fibers can be obtained from renewable sources, make natural fiber-reinforced composites a material useful for the future."
I hope this helps!
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Gloria
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Lovely Girl
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Thanks Gloria.. you are always there for me :-)
but i have a small comment .
you wrote .. (this, couples). so is there a comma before the word couples?
other thing,, do you have an idea how i rewrite the paragraph below with strong structure.
Natural fiber-reinforced composites with their favourable properties of strength, toughness, high modulus, low-cost, low density make them an attractive area of study for material scientists. This coupled with the uniqueness of being an environmentally friendly option in that the fibers can be obtained from renewable sources; make natural fiber-reinforced composites a material for the future.
Best regards
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Lovely Girl
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i'm back again, below there are two paragraphs about the same idea but i wrote them in different ways. i feel they both are not strong in grammer. i need help in rewriting them in one paragraph with good grammer. please ;-)
Natural fiber-reinforced composites with their favourable properties of strength, toughness, high modulus, low-cost, low density make them an attractive area of study for material scientists. This coupled with the uniqueness of being an environmentally friendly option in (grammar) that the fibers can be obtained from renewable sources; make natural fiber-reinforced composites a material for the future. Similarly, polymer-nanoclay composites have been widely investigated for their significant improvement in modulus, impact strength, barrier properties, heat resistance and thermal stability.
Natural fiber-reinforced composites have been attracted researchers for (bad grammar) their unique properties, such as strength, toughness, high modulus, low-cost, low density and environmentally friendly. Similarly, polymer-nanoclay composites have been widely investigated for their significant improvement in modulus, impact strength, barrier properties, heat resistance and thermal stability.
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EF_Team5
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Good morning!
I'm glad I can be of help! In regards to your comma question, yes, there are commas after "This" in both of my suggestions.
As for the new paragraphs, here are my suggestions:
"Natural fiber-reinforced composites, with their favourable properties of strength, toughness, high modulus, low-cost, and low density make them an attractive area of study for material scientists. This, coupled with the uniqueness of being an environmentally friendly option in that the fibers can be obtained from renewable sources, make natural fiber-reinforced composites a material for the future." Nice job!
"Natural fiber-reinforced composites, with their favourable properties of strength, toughness, high modulus, low-cost, and low density make them an attractive area of study for material scientists. This, coupled with the uniqueness of being an environmentally friendly option, in that the fibers can be obtained from renewable sources,make natural fiber-reinforced composites a material for the future. Similarly, polymer-nanoclay composites have been widely investigated for their significant improvement in modulus, impact strength, barrier properties, heat resistance and thermal stability." Very good!
"Natural fiber-reinforced composites have been attracted researchers because of their unique properties such as strength, toughness, high modulus, low-cost, low density and environmental friendliness. Similarly, polymer-nanoclay composites have been widely investigated for their significant improvement in modulus, impact strength, barrier properties, heat resistance and thermal stability." Good work!
In my humble opinion, I like the first of the two paragraphs about polymer-nanoclay composites; it flows nicely and is structurally sound. We're very heavy on comma use in your paper because by nature you need long sentences with numerous junctions due to your subject manner. It will be fine though, we just need to make sure we use them in the right places!
I hope this helps!
Regards,
Gloria
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