Hansen's disease - thesis statement works!

Greetings!

Your thesis statement is quite a mouthful! :-) It might be better to simplify it just a little; you can explain in the following sentences that it is "an acid-fast rod and also an obligate intracellular organism." How about something like this: Among the many different kinds of bacteria, there is only one which brings the misery of the infectious disease known as leprosy: mycobacterium leprae.

Remember that "bacteria" is plural and "bacterium" is singular; more than one bacterium equals bacteria.

I'll look forward to reading more. :-)

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com

LaDybLadE07 Member Posts: 1 Joined: Feb 21, 08 Ref.#: 5140	Feb 21, 08, 09:43am ¦ #1 title of my research paper is Hansen's disease:Leprosy, a disease bought by Mycobacterium leprae would it be right if my thesis statement will be... thesis statement: among all the different kinds of bacterias mycobacterium leprae, an acid-fast rod and also an obligate intracellular organism gives birth to infectious disease known as leprosy.

EF_Team2 Moderator Posts: 2319 Joined: Mar 1, 06 Ref.#: 5150	Feb 21, 08, 11:05pm ¦ #2 Greetings! Your thesis statement is quite a mouthful! :-) It might be better to simplify it just a little; you can explain in the following sentences that it is "an acid-fast rod and also an obligate intracellular organism." How about something like this: Among the many different kinds of bacteria, there is only one which brings the misery of the infectious disease known as leprosy: mycobacterium leprae. Remember that "bacteria" is plural and "bacterium" is singular; more than one bacterium equals bacteria. I'll look forward to reading more. :-) Thanks, Sarah, EssayForum.com

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